Our best sentences

We are learning to add detail and description to our writing. Here are some of our best sentences from this week:

• Ella: I felt the nice, cool breeze flowing around me.
• Melissa: It felt cold, like I was in summer clothes in Antarctica.
• Anna M: One of them bammed the book stand.
• Chloe: It was as fast as a racing car zooming across the sky.
• Anna S: My arm went fiery and sore.
• Brenna: "Eww, a worm!" I yelled.
• Rozena: The freezing wind was blowing through my hair.
• Hayden: When the ball went out, Hunter kicked it, then they booted it in the goal.
• Jess T: As I stepped out of the dripping, soggy car I scraped off some snowflakes.
• Cameron: "Wow." It was so cold I could feel the freezing, cold water making a swimming pool on my hair and then sliding off.
• Logan: The wind was as cold as ice cubes, as it blew straight past my face. 

Punctuation is fun!

• Punctuation makes our writing make sense.
• It is very important to show where sentences end and new ones begin.
• Did you know we can use kung fu to help us?

Check out this link to watch another class using it.

KUNG FU Punctuation

WALT: Edit our writing

When we edit our work we have to read it heaps of times! We check all of these things.

• Read it out loud - does it make sense? Add or remove what you need to.
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• Read it out loud - where do I stop to take a breath? Put in your full stops and capital letters.
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• Read it to check for capital letters - specific people, place or thing.
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• See what detail you can add to each event. Are you missing any of the 5Ws? Can you add something extra to your personal comment?
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• Is there anything you need to take out? This might be things that aren't related to story, or that you've repeated.
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• Check your spelling. Underline any words you think might be incorrect - sound them out as carefully as you can, then check them using a word list or dictionary.

WALT: use capital letters for Proper Nouns

A common noun is a person place or thing. Eg, school

A proper noun is a specific person, place or thing. Eg, Darfield Primary School

What needs a capital letter?

• A person's name
• Days, months and holidays (special days)
• Cities, countries and continents
• Events
• Movies, bands, books, plays, TV shows, magazines, sports teams
• Branded products

This game can help us to use capital letters in our sentences.
Magical Capitals