Our best sentences

We are learning to add detail and description to our writing. Here are some of our best sentences from this week:

• Ella: I felt the nice, cool breeze flowing around me.
• Melissa: It felt cold, like I was in summer clothes in Antarctica.
• Anna M: One of them bammed the book stand.
• Chloe: It was as fast as a racing car zooming across the sky.
• Anna S: My arm went fiery and sore.
• Brenna: "Eww, a worm!" I yelled.
• Rozena: The freezing wind was blowing through my hair.
• Hayden: When the ball went out, Hunter kicked it, then they booted it in the goal.
• Jess T: As I stepped out of the dripping, soggy car I scraped off some snowflakes.
• Cameron: "Wow." It was so cold I could feel the freezing, cold water making a swimming pool on my hair and then sliding off.
• Logan: The wind was as cold as ice cubes, as it blew straight past my face. 

WALT: Edit our writing

When we edit our work we have to read it heaps of times! We check all of these things.

• Read it out loud - does it make sense? Add or remove what you need to.
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• Read it out loud - where do I stop to take a breath? Put in your full stops and capital letters.
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• Read it to check for capital letters - specific people, place or thing.
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• See what detail you can add to each event. Are you missing any of the 5Ws? Can you add something extra to your personal comment?
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• Is there anything you need to take out? This might be things that aren't related to story, or that you've repeated.
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• Check your spelling. Underline any words you think might be incorrect - sound them out as carefully as you can, then check them using a word list or dictionary.

WALT: retell stories using the main points

We used storyboards......

....and story pyramids.

WALT: recognise short vowel sounds

The vowels are A E I O U. They can have long or short vowels.

The sound the letter makes is different from its name.
We are learning to recognise short vowel sounds. They are the sounds in the middle of these words.

cat
bed
pig
dog
bus

The Vowel Song (a e i o u)

WALT: use capital letters for Proper Nouns

A common noun is a person place or thing. Eg, school

A proper noun is a specific person, place or thing. Eg, Darfield Primary School

What needs a capital letter?

• A person's name
• Days, months and holidays (special days)
• Cities, countries and continents
• Events
• Movies, bands, books, plays, TV shows, magazines, sports teams
• Branded products

This game can help us to use capital letters in our sentences.
Magical Capitals